Instructions: Write an essay on any one of the following in about 1000-1200 words.
Time : 90 minutes
Marks : 125
1. Nearly all men can stand adversity, but if you want to test a man’s character, give him power.
2. The inherent vice of capitalism is the unequal sharing of blessings; the inherent virtue of socialism is the equal sharing of miseries.





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Thanks. Start writing. And, ask others to review.
Please sir you also review. Some answers were not reviewed yesterday. It discourages us to post on the forum, and given your expertise, it would help us improve too.
Kindly review my first essay Sir/ma’am,,, need ur valuable feedback,,also suggest me can i opt English as a medium? I m upset with my own performance,,,i need ur suggestion.
Please review my essay..
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philosophical type!!
examples if family,gram panchayat,weapons,gandhi ji standing for people etc are really good.
overall it seems nice essay
perhaps you can give current political example as well
like governor by govt is being used for political purpose not for welfare of poeple when he has capability to bring good for soicety,
art of speaking by this power you can energize,motivate poeple at the same you can misguide people like kashmiri youth are
and if possible give ancient time dimesnion as well in essay
ramayan mahabharat always works
like ravan was initally devotee later turned into mosnter
same for korvas once they got power
or may be environmental dimension- like its man duty and is his control to keep earth safe but due to greedy nature we are harming it then ex. of antartica,pollution etc
*these are just suggestion your essay is already good
let me know if we can use this kiind of eg in essay or not
Thanks for suggestions and yes we can use them in essay..
Kindly review my first essay Sir,,, need ur valuable feedback,,also suggest me can i opt English as a medium?
90/125
ur way of writing is excellent
gud command over language
examples are very relevent
i myself learned a lot by reading ur essay
keep writng
afspa example was very nice
worth reading!! really well structured, connected the example very well!!
Kindly review my first essay Sir/ma’am,,, need ur valuable feedback,,also suggest me can i opt English as a medium?
Your essay is pretty good as is evident from all the accolades you have got. Please review my essay on the same topic.
Nearly All Men Can Stand Adversity,But If You Want To Test A Man’s Character Give Him Power—–
Ships are safe in the harbour, but then, that is not what ships are made for. Ships are not meant to stand securely in harbours. They are meant to explore, discover and engage with the vast seas and the lands. The seas may not always be smooth, the shore may not always be in sight – yet ships sail and reach their destinations, some are wrecked on their path, whereas others reach the end point successfully, having faced the tumultuous oceans.
Similarly,adverse circumstances bring out the best in a human being.We run by the common belief that adversity is the real test of strength for man, which come to break us, but help us make ourselves what we are.But are adversities the true tests of character?? From where One stand, it isn’t adversities at all that define and capture a man’s character, but
prosperities and times of power
Having TRIALS and SUFFERINGS, having setbacks that need immense efforts to conquer, having UP’s and Down which once conquered might seem like real successes, but that’s only just the beginning.
Once you have gotten through what was probably the hardest journey of your life at a certain point of time you would probably think you’ve conquered the world. You feel POWERFUL and you tend to feel the world have succumbed to you. Now, this POWER that you have earned after tremendous efforts, how good is it really for you??
If you’re in power and you KNOW there’s nothing stopping you now, in this scenario you tend to take wrong route. There can be nothing more wonderful than a humble person in power, and there can be nothing more detrimental than a person misusing or abusing power. Having power is like walking on a double edge sword, you won’t know what killed you if you go too far on either extreme.
Positions of power does not only imply with respect to WORK per se. It also indicates having power over people among a group of friends, having power over a sibling etc Just because your friend is indebted to you (as you have done something for him/her), Just because you know that you are the truest friend anyone can have.It does not mean you have this authority to SURPASS him. Actually this is where delusions begin.
An act of selfishness should always be there. It is selfishness because you want YOUR friend to be happy, you want YOUR family to be at peace, you want YOUR neighborhood to have an aura of divinity, and you want YOUR society to be on a higher consciousness. And HAVING POWER OVER ONE PERSON or ten or a society makes it easier for you to enforce what you want on them. Would you go and help a stranger who can give you back NOTHING in return?
These people are policemen,politician and employers etc.A title,office or uniform provides them with power over us.A piece of paper,certificate,skin ,money,or just born with a silver spoon in a mouth does not mean he is a powerful person.Most people under this role tend to take on a submissive role and allow such people to dominate or intimidate them.
These power are just a ARTIFICIAL and only for the purpose of SHOWING OFF.
how power is HANDLED is test of character. A good man will not abuse power but will use it for the common good, for those his actions affect. A man with bad character will abuse power and use it solely for his own self-interest, will not be patient or understanding in his pursuits.With power comes responsibility, and concerns, and people may expect a lot from you. So, you need to be able to cope with the test of power which is harder than coping with normal unpleasant circumstances.
Though a man may be able to withstand many hardships due to strength it doesn’t mean that he is good or fair to others in his rule.All man is created as nearly equal to God, even the worst person have still its good side,otherwise a true test is power to handle..like the old times as the man handle power, as empires falls..though we realized why man fallen.
In an optimistic point of view, hardship or misfortune, no matter how distressing they can be, make us more mature and humble in life On the other hand, power as seducing as it might seem, has succeeded in changing the behavior of many people. Being in the center of attention, having everyone asking you for favors, easily makes one become not only
corrupted, but also uppish and big-headed. That is why, POWER IS CONSIDERED A CHARACTER TESTER.
Ships example was too long.Only after reading the second para it makes sense and is linked with the statement..Try framing it better.
There is no proper link between one para and other in some areas.
More content can be added as similar content is seen in different paragraphs.
You have focussed on the second half of the statement ..Not all can take adversity in the same way and handle it well..This part analysis is not there at all..
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Kindly review my first essay Sir,,, need your valuable feedback,,also suggest me can i opt English as a medium?
gud beginning to the point
write atleast 2 more pages
these are not more than 750 words
conclusion thoda bada likho atleast a page
thanks for the review.
ran out of time and idea will try to manage both .next time
70/125
becoz content is short
aur paragraph ko thoda bada rakho merge few paras
dont change para so frequently
Kindly review my first essay Sir,,, need ur valuable feedback,,also suggest me can i opt English as a medium? pls sir
1. Nearly all men can stand adversity, but if you want to test a man’s character, give him power.
I remember a short story from the Acharya Rajnish’s (Osho) book – “The Empty Boat”. Once upon a time, an old couple decided to go in search of truth and salvation as they had supposed to performed all their social duties like marriage of their daughters, establishment of sons, distribution of inherited properties and so on. Generally, we observe such tendencies of the old. Truth and GOD are last in queue to find. Anyway, so renounced the social life and started walking through a forest . After travelling of few months, they reached at the mouth of a river. Since, dusk was falling rapidly so they decide to spent the night at bank then to start journey in morning. In past few months, they were living the life of adversity and chaos and now the people of villages through they used to pass, started treating them as ‘Mahatma’ (as we generally do). Old man started to collect the wood so they light up at night. In the search of wood and debris, he found a box. When he opened it, he found gold coins, diamonds and jewelries. He got excited and shouted to her wife. The old lady ran to him and asked – what happened? The old man showed her the box full of gold and diamonds and directed her to hide with her it secretly. His eyes was sparkling but her wife got sad. He look at his face regretfully and asked – ” Do you still see golds? Do you still feel the power of money and worth? For me, it is worth not more than soil and you are asking me to hide this soil with me?” She started laughing but her facial expression was loudly validating the very truth of this world – Power of either money of position surface the true character of a person and what the character shown to us is fake and illusion.
This short story reflects a very truth of human character. Power and prestige have immense capability to change the character of a person. Forget about the talk of a common human being. It also applies on saint and orthodox religious people. Those who validate themselves as a staunch believer of GOD and project themselves as a true messenger of GOD, also don’t find the way of escaping the ostentation of power. The dominance character is very inherited in the gene of a person. He has always been eluded to power and might. History is full of such incidents how lust of power and prestige thrashed and scrapped the social and political harmony and has changed the human being into a beast. Pages of time history are colored with blood and headlines are bold with destruction of dynasties and empires. We have built our history on the ruin of humanity, moral and ethics and still claim to be a person of words and character.
We have always been supporter of peace and tranquility. The believe in principles of Buddha and Jain. We boast to have the great Ashoka on our soil. We are blessed with the great soul of Mahatma Gandhi, Rabindra Nath Tagore, Swami Vivekanand, Tilak, Patel, Bose, Bhagat Singh and so on. Their principles, ideology and the path of liberation are the lightening lamp of our own culture, character and thoughts. We are gifted with Ramayana, Gita and Quran whose each and every single verses show us the path of salvation and learn us the lesson of humanity. We have faith and believe in social cohesion and integrity whose base is built upon such pious and sacred pillars. Even, in the current situation, we know the value and weight of the slogan – “Bharat Mata ki Jai” and have devoted ourselves to serve the country and its people at the cost of own life. Of course, India has been a country of religion of saints. You can’t find such religious and cultural diversity anywhere else in the world. But, despite of such a strong moral and ethical character gene in our blood and highly skewed religious mindset we are ranked at the top position in corruption. The social conflict and imbalance of social responsibilities are frequently seen in out society. Our home is not remain a home but has been converted as a rest house. Tolerance has been taught us as a basic feature of social fabric but a small incidence convert us into a beast. Why such anomaly is prevailed in our society?
Unfortunately, we have lost the treasure of principles and ideologies that have been given to us in inheritance. We have forget out golden history of calmness and brotherhood. Lessons and morals that the history of India had given to us is no longer remember. Our real character is skin deep and our principles are so shallow that a small disturbance in set of minds and difference in views surface our real bad, horrendous character to forefront. Although it is not the only case of India, it is common to all society across the world. But, being a religious and tolerated country despite of diversity, such quick change in character is more pronounced. Such attitude has become crescendo in misery. Do you remember the shocking example of Bapu Asaram case and corruption charges alleged on AAP political party? They were supposed to be the representative of our determination, faith and believed but have now been bellied down in misery.
So, where the problem lies? What we we have missed in our learning? Where is the notch of this duality – good input but bad output? There are bundle of philosophies and social research papers are there on the human behavior. All have confirm on one major finding – human behavior and character are subject to change. They is biased to the surrounding environment and circumstances. Now, the nature of circumstances may differ person to person to ignite him to reveal real character. There are numerous causes that lead to change in human behavior but which cause will bring what kind of change in human behavior has always been a matter of debate and been argued among thinkers for a long time. But, one thing is clear and almost all are agreed that Power of money and social position are the most dominant factor to bring the real character of a person on surface. It is a litmus paper that test the moral, ethics, principle and integrity of a human being. Anyway, come to the question again, why we most of the time fails on the touchstone of moral values despite of having such a vast, valuable treasury of ideologies and principles?
If we try to find the answer of that question then we would shortly realize that we have full of library of such finest books on principle, ideology, thoughts but those words and lines have not been written on our heart or they have now been faded away through generation to generation. We have not attended the theory classes punctually but not attended the practical classes. When we were small children, we learnt that speaking lie or stealing is a bad habit but also learnt from our ancestors that such moral character are subject to change according to our comfort. We have not built a deep basin of knowledge but a shallow sea of contaminated ideas and thoughts. Our all religious preaches and moral stories of high souls are validated to school classes and even to primary classes. Once, we walk out from school, our all learning got vanished. Of course, our children will also go through the same school.
Heart is like a pond and power, prestige, allurement, anger etc are like rope. These are not actually a causing factor but a facilitating reason that bring the things sited deep in the heart. We are weak and wicked. We are morally disabled and mean. It is better to learn nothing than to learn something. Obviously such learning are wasteful that couldn’t find the cause of humanity and imbibe the feeling of mankind. Until and unless, we don’t bring our learning in practicality, we can’t judge ourselves and we can’t find the way of improving at the base of moral and ethics. We should know, that Gita’s verses and Mahatma Gandhi’s ideology and principles are meant to adopt in our daily life and be stand firmly in any situation of adversity. It would be more better if we left the process of learning and try to be awakened. An awakened soul is far better than a learned mind.
Prawachan khatm….:)
Thank you for your patience…
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Bhai, kuchh galti ho gayi ho to batao…..correct karunga …..
Do you brainstorm extensively prior to writing? I could not grab much ideas in mine. BTW nice one. If illustrations could have been given on Decentralization of local government (how states are apprehensive of a strong panchayatiraj) , Arm twisting tactics by developed nations esp USA in global forums : recent WTO standoff on generic drug , solar panel etc. I don’t know whether these can be added or not , if wrong please do rectify me.
You got a par excellent writing skill and your ideas are magnificent. I could not sail to those sides which you are doing with ease. Nice one
First thanks for such honor.
Second, I have been a good essay writer from school so such experience helps here also. I don’t know whether I meet the requirement of UPSC exam or not but every time I follow my instinct.your suggested points are very important in practicality for answer writing that I miss. You are correct in your way. Doubt is on mine…..:P
Yes , Those efforts in school have paid off for you. Keep ion writing , Many will learn and benefitted from yours. Can you please review mine?
Sure, I will review and let you know soon. Thanks.
TY
nhi yar……..bas try apolitical!
Excellent writing skills but few suggestions:
1.work upon grammatical errors.with excellent vocab + excellent grammar.,your essay would become a wonderful piece
2 essay has been written energetically.a little toning down of language is required
3 towards conclusion a drift towards optimism would have been better.i mean last 2-3 paras even if pessimistic approach was followed
4 dont name any political party.a civil servant is expected to be politically neutral
5 fault is not there in values and ideologies but fault is ours that we forgot to implement and cherish our ideals
6 avoid extreme Statements like you wont find such an spiritual and moral country like India
7 can bring in some contemporary examples to connect well
If you had to give a speech on the topic perhaps audience would have given standing ovation but as an essay it needs balancing
Thank you
Thank you so much for your valuable feedback. I would take care of it in future.
Kindly review my first essay Sir,,, need ur valuable feedback,,also suggest me can i opt English as a medium?
Great approach. you have maintained continuity.
Just tell us how do you approach to such a kind of essays.
others have mentioned different examples but again their is some break in the story of other’s essay. but your approach is like k we are reading some saint’s views.
plzz check
@Rashi27:disqus @disqus_ncGBFKzoIr:disqus @rajkumarghiya:disqus @ForumIAS:disqus plzz check my essay
intro can be improved and if you are not able to come with some unique quote,story,poem etc just write plane definition of keywords of essay like in this essay
like this is how i did tough this is not best.
adversity is a unexpected event such as disaster,sorry,death, trauma,torture,pain etc which can cause darkness in poeple life
and character is thing which will help a man to fight against the odds.
character consist of certain quality special to a person both positive and negative
like politeness,humblness,honesty,lier,dedicated,lazy,obeying,disrespecting etc
more focus should be given on second part of essay and give examples.
dont take extreme stand in essay
otherwise keep writing you will improve.
1. Dont u think u completely missed first part of the quote??
2. There are breaks from one para to next.. work on linking
3. Do not write in extremes.there is a line in some page that Every powerful person in India has some self objective.. avoid writing Every here
4. Conclusion seems missing
5. The number of questions you pose in intro.. do answer them too.. u didnt answer all of them
6. Pose questions related to quote.. like why adversity cannot test man’s character?? What makes power test it only? How is power related to character?
Btw nice content and it was nice essay.. above points are observation for improvement only 🙂
Review mine too
i agree with most of ur points ……
i will write on ly those question that can be answered
plzz tell
i missed one part
point no 6 is very important
thanks for ur critical analysis
These are very good suggestions,Perhaps you can share your appraoch of essay.
Thanks 🙂
Even im learning.. My strategy might not be reliable enough
Kindly review my first essay Sir,,, need ur valuable feedback,,also suggest me can i opt English as a medium? need suggestion please
Please Review the 1st Essay , It’s my 2nd time and my last essay was not reviewed , So kindly review so that I will rectify my mistakes as early as possible. Waiting for your feedbacks. Thank You



Please Review.
Kindly review my first essay Sir,,, need ur valuable feedback,,also suggest me can i opt English as a medium?
Hi, lets the following observations I made on your article:
Ashoka and Akbar were great kings even when they were in full power. So, it doesn’t seem in line of the topic. However the example of Hitler is perfect one.
The discussion of Vedic period doesn’t seem relevant here. Do you?
Through separation of power you have discussed how absolute power to Center is prevented. But union list gives exclusive rights to Center in some matter for making laws. Does it always reflect the bad side of Center? Even such exclusive rights protect the sovereignty of India. Isn’t the absolute power of Union has a good feature?
Then you have discussed about the social hierarchy. You have discussed how powerful people at top level dominates the weak people at bottom. Thats fine but here you missed to talk about character affected by power. Same way, power distribution at world level doesn’t deal with the individual character of institutional body and country.
I think you have missed the critical part of the essay – i.e. how character of an individual is affected by the power and prestige. The topic is centered to a person or institution whose character can be dealt at multi level platform.
Hope you would have got my points.
Thanks.
Review my essay too, dude.
Thanks for the valuable suggestions. So how much it could fetch me?
Hehehehe….no idea bro.
@ForumIAS:disqus @Rashi27:disqus @disqus_ncGBFKzoIr:disqus Please Review The Essay and Recommend Suggestions to incorporate. Please
Whatever content you had, you have presented it fine. Liked the analogy in the end. Content is not much, it is around 700 words. You need to go deeper in the subject and not only talk about the governance issues in India, but also around the world and also delve a bit into the philosophy of the two.
Suggestions: Thomas Piketty-capitalism and inequality can be quoted, Aldous Huxley told about the numbness of society caused when there is no competition as in socialism, talk about China and how private companies like google and twitter are not allowed, which in fact is an attack on the freedom of speech of citizens.
@ZhuangZhang:disqus Can you please review my essay on the 2nd topic. Thanks in Advance !
Kindly review my first essay Sir,,, need ur valuable feedback,,also suggest me can i opt English as a medium?
please review-eassay on 2nd topic

Good one. Concepts Marx and Adam smith covered really well. Please review mine on the same topic.
Suggestions
1. Examples from around the world could be used. ex: Great depression for capitalism and Hindu rate of growth for socialism.
2. How different theories can work together could be explained towards the end.
yup missed that.thanks
Initial 3 pages are very nice. You are very well versed in the philosophical aspects, but the quality deteriorated towards the end. The examples are neither rich in number nor in diversity. The content is not much, around 700 words.
thanks for the review.points noted.actually i got diverted from the central themes.so later i wanted to make it short,in that process the flow and enrichment suffered.
Please review my essay too.
u tried well and philosophical aspect and explanation of capitalism and socialism is nice..
i think u must focus more on bringing out the limitations of capitalism and addressing them through socialism which the topic requires..
keep writing..
thanks..will improve next time
Please review. Essay on 2nd topic.

from the 2nd essay question what i understood was-how capitalism has failed in trickling down the growth and how socialism disincentivises merit and therefore leads to creation of miseries for the hardworking lot too.
overall u need to be more concise,to the point and diverse.
@amolsdandge:disqus Thanks for the review!
Nice attempt. Having said that here are a few points:
1.I felt you have partially digressed from the topic. At one point of time I felt as if I am reading a textbook explaining capitalism and socialism. You can keep on repeating the topic in your head every five minutes while you are writing the essay.
2.Your examples of combining capitalism and socialism are good, but other examples are not accompanied by sufficient amount of philosophy. You need to elaborate a bit more about the two philosophies and give separate examples for each of their successes and failures rather than giving an overarching example of Mohan and Rakesh, although the example is commendable.
3. Content has to be increased to at least two more pages.
@ZhuangZhang:disqus Thankyou so much for the inputs 🙂
Review mine too.
This statement directly saying that if one want to judge the other person give him a strong controlling power , automatically a man true character will come to know . The man character can come to know between two words one is adversity and the second one is prosperity . Adversity is one which the man bad or some tough situation is going on for some time . prosperity is one in which the man good luck or some successfuly things happening in life . In adversity only the man are humble , calm , etc. In prosperity the man are some king of egoistic . for example there are three friends . They say that we are the best friends . There name is Rahul , Vishal , Rushi . One day there results has came rushi and rahul was the first and vishal was the second . one day there was the fight between vishal and some other boys immediately rahul has taken the side of the vishal but rushi has not come to take the side of the vishal . beacuse rushi has got prosperity in life thats what his ego has come between to take the side of the vishal. That day the vishal has come to know who is the real friend .
but i think through prosperity every people dont have egoism type of nature . for example some of people get nobel prize .
Lord krishna has also some superior power , even though he has not given his humblyness
Kindly review my first essay Sir,,, need ur valuable feedback,,also suggest me can i opt English as a medium?
1. Your way of expression is good.. considering it is ur 1st essay, it is very good
2. You have almost concluded with examples that power reveals negative character.. in essay and Gs dont get into extreme.. try to balance.. write positive examples too.. not everyone misuses their power.. had all the legislators been misusing their power, then we would have been autocratic country by today.. newspapers normally write negative but try find positive..
3. Keep writing and you will think in more dimensions.. i already liked ur dimensions but u need to expand to meet word limit
4. I could not relate ur 1st two paras with the topic
Dont be upset with ur performance.. with time we improve..
For english as a medium.. i saw few basic mistakes like spelling of ‘implement’ was wrong, it should be ‘accept’ not ‘except’ in 1st page.. if you can avoid such mistakes and are comfortable with English more than any other language then opt for it.. if you are better in any other regional language, go for it.. it really doesn’t matter in what language u write as long as matter is good
thank you ,,, it means a lot for me,,, thanks a lot for replying,,, i will consider and keep ur points while writing…
Brother,As ps per this essay i can say you dont need to be upset, If it is your first essay.
In my initial 3 essay i could not even write a single page was running short of ideas.
Just keep writing or even if you dont write you atleast prepare framework how you would approach a particular essay.
Thanku sir,,, i will improve it
Hi Bro, Rashi and Raj has given a great feed back. you need not worry to pick up english as a medium. if u have enough ideas and command on paticular topic, then medium is not a barrier. so go ahead try to devolop day by day, but you have to maintain consistancy in learning new things either in subject and english.
thank you for replying ,,, yes i will improve next time
Hi brother,
It is good you started writing…. Please make your handwriting legible….. also scanning is not clear..Please use cam scanner going forward… Regarding comments Please add multiple dimensions to it……. with lot of current examples…All the very best friend…Enjoy writing
thank you brother
2. The inherent vice of capitalism is the unequal sharing of blessings; the inherent virtue of socialism is the equal sharing of miseries
Kindly review my first essay,,, need ur valuable feedback,,also suggest me can i opt English as a medium?
The Inherent Vice Of Capitalism Is The Unequal Sharing Of Blessings;The Inherent Virtue Of Socialism Is The Equal Sharing Of Miseries—–
These words of Winston Churchill clearly depicted the pros & cons of both capitalist & socialistic economies. Both the economic systems are not perfect & not incorruptible.
In capitalism resources & goods are privately owned whereas in socialism resources are owned by the government or public. Distribution & earning of wealth is the main distinguishing element of both systems. In capitalistic society, people earn wealth for themselves while in socialistic society the earned wealth is distributed among everyone. In former system, government has no role to play other than ensuring that everyone is equal before the law but in latter government has a pivotal role of deciding that how the wealth is to be distributed in public.
Liberty – In socialism, your liberty is your human right to shelter, food, water, healthcare, education and other necessities with no need for financial instability. Through this you have freedom and can pursue happiness as long as your pursuit does not affect other people’s liberty.
In Capitalism, your liberty is your human right to freedom, to own property and the pursuit of happiness. There is no basic right that grants every citizen a house or food, healthcare, education or other necessities – these are all socialist ideas and prior to those social and political advancements, you had to buy those basic rights.
Economy–Socialism is an economic theory that works in post-capitalism and post-abundance scenarios. It’s still experimental and currently only mixed economies have proven to be sustainable. That being said, socialism has never been in post-industrial post-abundance societies as Marx theorised and we have yet to see an actual socialist society exist.
Capitalism is an economic system that is tried and tested and has existed for a few centuries and developed to become what it has today. There’s ups and downs but it smoothed out into a workable system. It works because it’s the best way of allocating resources of scarcity. The key feature of capitalism however, is the boom and bust cycle which continues and with
each boom and bust you get instability, political, economic and social. On top of that, nations develop unevenly.
Wealth Equality – Socialism aims to do away with wealth and instead, using the infrastructure laid out by capitalism, provide an abundance of resources which are allocated to citizens. This could either be through a ‘credit system’, commoning
or state allocation. Thus, because everyone can have according to need. There would theoretically be no financial instability, all we need to do is work for the day, go home and then all our electricity and water is provided for us and so on.
Capitalism creates a large wealth gap between the rich and poor and increasingly becomes centralised without intervention. Capitalism doesn’t seem to redistribute wealth and the increase of the wealth gap eventually leads to social and political instability.
Social Equality – Socialism sees all humans as equals. Rather, instead of seeing race, gender or ethnicity, they see only class. There are no nations or segregation in socialism. Socialism is an egalitarian ideology and champions egalitarianism.
Capitalism, or should I say, liberal capitalism, champions equal rights and freedom too.
Economic theorists say that socialism evolves from capitalism. It improves upon it by providing a direct route between citizens and goods and services. The people own the factors of production instead of the capitalist.
Many socialistic countries own the companies in oil, gas and other energy-related resources. It’s strategic for the government to control these profitable industries. The government collects the profit instead of corporate taxes. It also distributes these profits in government spending programs. These state-owned companies still compete with
private ones in the global economy.
Most Western democracies have elements of socialism whether that is social medicine provision, welfare, pensions and can also extend into public ownership of infrastructure such as railways, freeways and subways.
Both the system of economies has its own merits & demerits. Capitalism do ensure speedy progress of the nation by virtue of competition. Everyone works for serving himself thus there is adequate availability of labour & human resource which adds up to the high growth rate of the economy. On the other hand, it doesn’t guarantee that every individual will get the minimum requirement of life which is direct violation of human rights.Thus the system has a inbuilt shortcoming of increasing the gap between rich & poor. The ubiquitous competition may act as a catalyst to corruption & bureaucracy.
In socialism, people works for everyone, thus everyone gets what they want & when they want for free. Such a system is very effective in thwarting the curse of poverty & equalizes people on same standard. On different note, it lacks a motivation factor to contribute for the progress of society where every individual can get what they want without actually
working for it. Such a society may result into a stagnant society with a low progress rate. It also doesn’t guarantee that government will be free from corruption & bureaucracy.
The main crux is that both systems have some underlying merits & demerits. We should devise a new system which has merits of both systems such that it ensures healthy competition while safeguarding the interest of under-privileged.
review pls:-) first essay
Content is good.The way you brought historical examples and dimensions is impressive.Try to frame it in a better way and you need to work on conclusion..Rest is good..Keep writing..
Thnx for reviewing .will definately try to improve structuring and conclusion .
Friends, I am a little late, but please review. Better late than never, right?
Nearly all men can stand adversity, but if you want to test a man’s character, give him power
Abraham Lincoln gave us the above criterion to test a man’s character. And he was no ordinary man. This calls for examining this statement and delve deeply. Is it the right criterion to judge a man’s character? Why does he trivialize withstanding adversities? What about the countless books on motivation, stories about people overcoming all odds? Do the values of courage and resilience in face of obstacles have no meaning for Lincoln?
To understand this, we need to look at the life of Lincoln himself. His mother died when he was very young. His fiance died next. He suffered depression twice. He lost in a number of elections. He was told that he couldn’t speak in front of people. All these adversities and still he says all men can stand adversity?
Yes, because the uniqueness of Lincoln’s life doesn’t end at this. He became the president of the United States of America. An inspiring story of overcoming all odds. But what does he do next? He abolishes slavery! Yes! He abolishes a century-long practice of exploitation and human rights violation. It is undoubtedly his finest, most profound achievement.
This shows the beauty of Lincoln’s personality, a manifestation of which is this statement. Someone has correctly said that your character is what you do when nobody is watching you. People mostly portray an image of themselves in society because they are powerless in front of societal norms. They need to follow what the society tells them. But as soon as the person is alone, he is all powerful. He can do whatever he wants, think whatever he wants, whatever he does is his true self. It is his character.
Why do rapes happen in India? Is it because men are stronger than women? No, it is because men think that they are more powerful because of their patriarchal mindset. As as soon as one changes the structure of society, converts the mindset of people from men being powerful to women, scenario will reverse. What happens in many families in India between the daughter-in-law and the mother-in-law is not hidden. The mother-in-law has the power and hence, she uses it for her own advantage.
That is not to say that withstanding adversity is easy. Many people are not able to withstand adversities. Some people who are not able to face the trials and tribulations of life commit suicide. Having said that, one must remember that humans are naturally designed to be active. A sedentary person becomes obese. A life without challenges and obstacles is a stagnant life. One should either face challenges or perish.
One of the great lesson that adversity teaches us is empathy, to feel the pain of others. Once a person goes through some pain, he will know what it entails. If the same person is given power, he will ensure that such pain is not caused to others. But if he does not do so, if he misuses the power given to him, adversities have failed to teach him. He has not grown as a person, though he has faced adversity.
There are numerous examples of people who faced a lot of pain, but have not been able to manage the responsibility which comes with power. One of the most famous cyclists of our generation Lance Armstrong who had talent and worked hard at his sport, gave a cause for us to admire him even more when he overcame cancer. But soon he was found to use drugs to improve his game. Same is the case with Tiger Woods who was a champion player of golf and must have faced a lot of obstacles before reaching the world number 1 position, but failed in his life.
Examples are not hard to find in India too. The host of the much publicised The Kapil Sharma Show, Mr. Kapil Sharma couldn’t deal with all the fame and success which the show brought him and fought with his colleagues. One definitely wishes that such things don’t happen to the people we admire, but the reality is that managing power responsibly is way more difficult than overcoming adversities. Yet another example is the recent slap on the wrist of the armed forces by the Supreme Court. They were given powers under the Armed Forces Special Powers Act (AFSPA) to shoot at people who they perceived as threat without any prior permission, but it is alleged that they killed many innocent people. The armed forces clearly failed to use the power properly.
One of the best features of democracy is that it understands the statement very well. The system is based on the thought that one person or institution neither has the right to manage the affairs of a country nor will it be able to put the given power given to proper use. The case of India is relevant. The legislature, the executive and the judiciary keep a watch on each other and ensure that there is a check and balance system. Any policy has first to be passed by the representatives of people sitting in the parliament who have the choice to either accept or reject a bill.
All the different scenarios, lives of famous people, behaviour of members of our society and even the governance structure in our country and other parts of the world indicate the subtle balance between power and responsibility. It is as if power and responsibility are playing a see-saw game. One version of a person is sitting on the power side and the other is sitting on the responsibility side. The more power one has, the more responsible one should be. As soon as a person fails to maintain the balance, the see-saw of character falls and the game ends.
Friends, I am a little late, but please review. Better late than never, right?
Nearly all men can stand adversity, but if you want to test a man’s character, give him power
Abraham Lincoln gave us the above criterion to test a man’s character. And he was no ordinary man. This calls for examining this statement and delve deeply. Is it the right criterion to judge a man’s character? Why does he trivialize withstanding adversities? What about the countless books on motivation, stories about people overcoming all odds? Do the values of courage and resilience in face of obstacles have no meaning for Lincoln?
To understand this, we need to look at the life of Lincoln himself. His mother died when he was very young. His fiance died next. He suffered depression twice. He lost in a number of elections. He was told that he couldn’t speak in front of people. All these adversities and still he says all men can stand adversity?
Yes, because the uniqueness of Lincoln’s life doesn’t end at this. He became the president of the United States of America. An inspiring story of overcoming all odds. But what does he do next? He abolishes slavery! Yes! He abolishes a century-long practice of exploitation and human rights violation. It is undoubtedly his finest, most profound achievement.
This shows the beauty of Lincoln’s personality, a manifestation of which is this statement. Someone has correctly said that your character is what you do when nobody is watching you. People mostly portray an image of themselves in society because they are powerless in front of societal norms. They need to follow what the society tells them. But as soon as the person is alone, he is all powerful. He can do whatever he wants, think whatever he wants, whatever he does is his true self. It is his character.
Why do rapes happen in India? Is it because men are stronger than women? No, it is because men think that they are more powerful because of their patriarchal mindset. As as soon as one changes the structure of society, converts the mindset of people from men being powerful to women, scenario will reverse. What happens in many families in India between the daughter-in-law and the mother-in-law is not hidden. The mother-in-law has the power and hence, she uses it for her own advantage.
That is not to say that withstanding adversity is easy. Many people are not able to withstand adversities. Some people who are not able to face the trials and tribulations of life commit suicide. Having said that, one must remember that humans are naturally designed to be active. A sedentary person becomes obese. A life without challenges and obstacles is a stagnant life. One should either face challenges or perish.
One of the great lesson that adversity teaches us is empathy, to feel the pain of others. Once a person goes through some pain, he will know what it entails. If the same person is given power, he will ensure that such pain is not caused to others. But if he does not do so, if he misuses the power given to him, adversities have failed to teach him. He has not grown as a person, though he has faced adversity.
There are numerous examples of people who faced a lot of pain, but have not been able to manage the responsibility which comes with power. One of the most famous cyclists of our generation Lance Armstrong who had talent and worked hard at his sport, gave a cause for us to admire him even more when he overcame cancer. But soon he was found to use drugs to improve his game. Same is the case with Tiger Woods who was a champion player of golf and must have faced a lot of obstacles before reaching the world number 1 position, but failed in his life.
Examples are not hard to find in India too. The host of the much publicised The Kapil Sharma Show, Mr. Kapil Sharma couldn’t deal with all the fame and success which the show brought him and fought with his colleagues. One definitely wishes that such things don’t happen to the people we admire, but the reality is that managing power responsibly is way more difficult than overcoming adversities. Yet another example is the recent slap on the wrist of the armed forces by the Supreme Court. They were given powers under the Armed Forces Special Powers Act (AFSPA) to shoot at people who they perceived as threat without any prior permission, but it is alleged that they killed many innocent people. The armed forces clearly failed to use the power properly.
One of the best features of democracy is that it understands the statement very well. The system is based on the thought that one person or institution neither has the right to manage the affairs of a country nor will it be able to put the given power given to proper use. The case of India is relevant. The legislature, the executive and the judiciary keep a watch on each other and ensure that there is a check and balance system. Any policy has first to be passed by the representatives of people sitting in the parliament who have the choice to either accept or reject a bill.
All the different scenarios, lives of famous people, behaviour of members of our society and even the governance structure in our country and other parts of the world indicate the subtle balance between power and responsibility. It is as if power and responsibility are playing a see-saw game. One version of a person is sitting on the power side and the other is sitting on the responsibility side. The more power one has, the more responsible one should be. As soon as a person fails to maintain the balance, the see-saw of character falls and the game ends.
Amazing essay
please dont mind this reply is directed towards chandler..(as no option to reply on his comment)
essay review
good:
lance armstrong,tiger woods example.However their status cannot be equated with power in conventional sense.
Bad:
-The essay lacked coherence.It looked like haphazard collection rather than systematic assimilation and evoultion of thought process.
-Lacked depth of understanding the subject matter.
-It was tedious to read complete essay.You need make it more interesting.
-Language and expression below par.
-Too much focus on LINCOLN.I thought m reading essay on LINCOLN.
Sorry for being too critical just tried to be honest.Anyway keep improving.
No problem 🙂 Will try to improve
1. Instances of people mishandling power are good but reason(psychological/social) for such misuse could be added. [Any theory added could fetch bonus points !]
2. Rape wala example does not fit very well into the agenda.
3. Democracy example is great.
4. Conclusion is more of a result than recommendation. Some solution could be added like simulation exercise for mid level officers, assessment center method.
I am a beginner. Plz take these with a grain of salt 🙂
Thanks for taking out your time and reading the essay. Appreciate it !!
Thanks! But your response is different from the others.. wonder what to believe…